Travellers - There's something about Mary...
That's ...beautiful. Could be Rose and the Doctor, or any one who's ever loved anyone :-) It's incandescent. Just like you :-)
I'd love to be able to write proper, quality, poetry. But hopefully this attempt isn't too cringeworthy....
Hey as poems go, and I've read a lot, that's as good as any of them.
It's very beautiful, unforced, invoking beautiful imagery, personal relationships and shared experiences, excellent use of metaphors. All excellent marks of quality in poetry, and none of marks of quality are really needed as long as it can be defined as poetry and is readable (even then, some of the greatest are incredibly hard to read).
I very, very much enjoyed it. And if I had one criticism, just one, it's how quick you are to assign it an underdog status. It's good, would have beaten the poem I wrote at the science festival last year. If they're running that event again, I think you should enter :)
Cringeworthy is entirely the wrong word to describe this. :-) It's structured, has a unity of theme and purpose ( without excluding individual interpretations or thematic diversity ) and is honest.
And it is beautiful, drawn from your heart (and though that isn't everything, poetry without it is nothing)
No, love. This is good.
|Date:||May 28th, 2011 04:03 pm (UTC)|| |
I Iike it!
as a (really amatuer) poet myself, I have to applaud this!
It IS really good, very descriptive, slow moving, emotive.
Maybe one day I'll come up with a gem like that.
Nic (yes that nic from the party,I'm everywhere!) xox